Gary's Training Begins!

It was PSA's starting year when a bright looking penguin appeared and stated himself to be ''Gary''. He was wearing a lab coat, a pair of scientific goggles and holding some kind of chemical in his hand. He said that it was his first day as a PSA Scientist and wanted to meet the crew. Pyro a shaggy looking character, Aryo PSA's very best and, Jet Pack Guy all stood there to welcome their new companion. Pyro never seemed enthusiastic of the idea of a new member and didn't seem to be interested in even saying Hello to Gary. Aryo and Jet Pack Guy introduced themselves and told him that they wanted to see him in action.

Gary explained every thing about mechanics and told them that he was creating PSA's very first SPM or a gadget used to locate any crime going on in Club Penguin. Pyro left the scene while Aryo and Jet Pack Guy stood in awe. As soon as he turned it on a flashing light was displaying on the SPM. The PSA's agents were thankful of the brilliant gadget he had produced for them. Suddenly Gary's watch started blinking and he touched the big yellow button on it. It was a message from the director saying:
''Gary get ready for your training in becoming PSA's elite scientist''
He knew what he had to do and exited the scene, flew off to the ice berg to inspect what had gone wrong and went to the secret place the Director told him about.

Wow, great job. The story is really an original. I've heard about EPF stories but never a lot of PSA-related stroies. Good work, though there are specks of incorrect grammar here and there. I think you'll do great if Ccpenguin comes to rate the story.

Have you read the thread ' A Good Guide to Writing Stoies' by Ccpenguin as well? There are nearly 20 tips on writing good stories and the number keeps growing. Do check that out!

Nicktang10 wrote:Wow, great job. The story is really an original. I've heard about EPF stories but never a lot of PSA-related stroies. Good work, though there are specks of incorrect grammar here and there. I think you'll do great if Ccpenguin comes to rate the story.

Have you read the thread ' A Good Guide to Writing Stoies' by Ccpenguin as well? There are nearly 20 tips on writing good stories and the number keeps growing. Do check that out!

Thanks. I'm not very good at writing these kind of stories because I often loose control of my grammar, but hey everything can improve thanks for pointing the mistakes out.

8/10! As for grammar it does not really matter to me

totelyawsome wrote:8/10! As for grammar it does not really matter to me

Thanks! I'll try to improve and make it far better next time!

Sky Blue wrote:

totelyawsome wrote:8/10! As for grammar it does not really matter to me

Thanks! I'll try to improve and make it far better next time!

by the grammar part I meant in most stories I see there are grammar mistakes and I never really pay attention to it but I looked at it again and it was really good. so change my rating to 10/10

7/10.

I will write a proper review in the morning. Nice plot, yet some minor grammar mistakes.

Ccpenguin8 wrote:7/10.

I will write a proper review in the morning. Nice plot, yet some minor grammar mistakes.

Thanks Cc I'll try to improve my plot and grammar.

9/10. This story is very good and the plot is quite interesting but there are a few minor grammar mistakes. Don't worry though, they are quite minor

Sindar

Sindar Toffe wrote:9/10. This story is very good and the plot is quite interesting but there are a few minor grammar mistakes. Don't worry though, they are quite minor

Sindar

Thanks Sindar I'll try to improve the next time I write one. I also thought that It should've been more detailed.